can someone revise this paragraph'

'' In minutes that matter and food that fuels the protagonists are both helpers that made a difference in the world with their thinking skills.The groups also took their activity time to help people with heating homes and donating phones.The difference between the 2 hero groups is one group worked to heat up homes with leftover oil. The other group also worked very hard to donate over 180 million minutes to soldiers! ''

then write another one on how your revision improved you last paragraph (25 points and brainliest to best answer)

Answer:

Within minutes, the matter and food that fuels the protagonists are both helpers that made a difference in the world with their thinking skills. The groups also took their own free time to help people heat up their homes and donate phones. The difference between the two hero groups is that one group worked to heat up homes with leftover oil. The other group also worked very hard to donate over 180 million minutes to soldiers!

Explanation:

I improved the paragraph by adding commas where much needed pauses are needed, as well as adding adverbs.

Much of the paragraph is missing important pauses, causing it to feel rushed. In other words, it's important that your readers wouldn't be running out of breath reading your story. I also just changed  phrase that seemed to stick out a bit.

I changed "activity time", being changed to just "free time", as "free time is far more commonly used to describe one's own time for their own activities.

I also changed "in" to "within" as it is generally best in novels to have more, long or intricate words in novels. It makes papers seem more professional.

Finally, I fixed some spelling errors like a missing space after "Phones.", and changing the "2" to a "two" as any number under ten should always be spelled out (if the number is 10 or over then it's optional).

For improving your paragraph learning you should read it about 5 times than try to explain it to your self in the most easy words you find.Try to only learn the important pints.

It helps me alot .hope it helps you to

which word in this sentence is a correlative conjuction

which sentence best describes voice rather than style?

which option is a complex sentence

had poes short story been set in a different time period, do you think the story would have been as effective? explain in a 100-word essay
im talking about edgar allan poes short story about the spanish inquisition btw

plz help me..

In my town, the Chinese Cultural Center offers language lessons on Saturday mornings from 9 to noon. My parents were born in China, but I wasn’t. My parents were educated in a Chinese language called Mandarin, but I go to a school where we all speak English. As a result, my family worries that even if we speak Chinese together at home (and we usually do), I might not truly understand our culture or learn how to read or write enough Chinese characters to be literate and fluent.


The narrator's parents

I. were born in China
II. spoke Mandarin at school
III. never learned English

A
I only

B
II only

C
I and II only

D
I, II, and III

At the beginning of the novel, _____ This is because he has no idea what is about to happen and because he is inexperienced in how to survive in a crisis. (Hatchet)

Your brain is the control center of your entire body. Write an informative essay explaining how people can keep their brains healthy and safe. Use information from the passages in your essay.


What are the DO words?

brains, body, control center

healthy, safe, essay

Write, explain, use


(This is probably obvious, I was just a bit confused on what it was asking

which sentence is the most concise?

Select the correct answers.
Which two sentences use coordinate adjectives?
The dark, musty cellar was full of mice.
We rode down a long dirt road on a sunny morning.
The dark-haired, hazel-eyed baby was gurgling happily.
Alan is wearing a pale blue sweater.

Imagine a merchant has 126 bottles of wine in her inventory. She wants to sell 31 of them to a customer. Using a counting board, how would she calculate the number of bottles she will have left in her inventory if she makes this sale?

A
The merchant begins with 157 pebbles on the right side of the counting board. 31 pebbles are moved to the left side from the right side. The total number of pebbles remaining on the right side is the number of bottles she will have in her inventory if she makes the sale.

B
The merchant begins with 95 pebbles on the left side of the counting board. 31 pebbles are added to the left side of the counting board. The total number of pebbles on the left side is the number of bottles she will have in her inventory if she makes the sale.

C
The merchant begins with 126 pebbles on the left side of the counting board. 31 pebbles are moved from the left side to the right side. The total number of pebbles remaining on the left side is the number of bottles she will have in her inventory if she makes the sale.

D
The merchant begins with 126 pebbles on the right side of the counting board. 31 pebbles are moved to the left side from the right side. The total number of pebbles remaining on the right side is the number of bottles she will have in her inventory if she makes the sale.

E
The merchant begins with 95 pebbles on the right side of the counting board. 31 pebbles are added to the left side of the counting board. The total number of pebbles on the right side is the number of bottles she will have in her inventory if she makes the sale.

Identify the words with a similar denotation as terrified.

options:

frightened


hesitant


anxious


scared

Plese help! Read the excerpt below and answer the question.

“Well,” he says, “there’s excuse for picks and letting-on, in a case like this; if it warn’t so, I wouldn’t approve of it, nor I wouldn’t stand by and see the rules broke—because right is right, and wrong is wrong, and a body ain’t got no business doing wrong when he ain’t ignorant and knows better. It might answer for you to dig Jim out with a pick, without any letting-on, because you don’t know no better; but it wouldn’t for me, because I do know better.”

The meaning in this excerpt is _____.

explicit
inferred
connoted
implicit

write a letter to the President of Gulshan Club to organize a winter festival program in the club premises.
(250 words)
Hints: food, winter clothes, educational things for children, baby foods, time, date, day, etc.

PLS HURRY!!

write the plural of each noun.
1 child ______________
2 friend _____________
3 baby ______________
4 lunch ______________
5 bike ________________

Vocabulary in Context: “Big Henryk was holding Kuba upside down by his ankles while Ferdi walloped Kuba’s rump with a big bone, one of many that were lying around”. Based on the context clues, what does wallop most likely mean? A.Tickle B.Strike C.Slice D.Scrape

NEED HELP RIGHT NOWWW!!!

HELP PLEASE I WILL GIVE BRAINLIEST AND 50 POINTS

Describe the mood during the christmas scene in the opening pages of chapter 15 ?

( book : freak the mighty )

help me compare the poem "Funeral" to the book The Outsiders PLSSS!!
In the poem "Funeral", how does Ponyboy compare to Ralph in their experiences of moving on? What results for the two characters after the loss of their friends?

select all that apply
How do we know that some pattern, rhythm, or meter was present in some of the Psalms?

Many psalms were sung.
The first line of the Psalm states the pattern.
Many musical words and notes are used in the psalms.
Rhythm is detected when a psalm is read aloud.

PLEASE HELP - I WILL GIVE 30 POINTS AND BRAINLIEST IF YOU GET IT RIGHT

Quote Analysis : “ They’re all just make - believe, this dream I was having for a long time, and now I’m awake again and he’s filling the room somehow, even though we’re outside. ” page 102 Who are “ they ” ? Why are “ they ” compared to a dream ?

( book : freak the mighty )

I need help on question D And you will have to look at the answer from question C !
I need answer ASAP PLZ! First one to answer will get a brainliest!

which sentence is the most concise

It is March 15, in the year 2514. The people of former New York are in desperate circumstances. They are being overrun, and they are losing hope. The banners proclaiming a Free the Real NYC lie in the gutters, trampled by terrified and panicked citizens. Two teens– or kidz, as they are called now– are on their way home from a secret meeting. As they walk in the shadows to avoid detection, they both trip on a huge titanium cylinder. Etched into the surface are a series of scratched-out words. The only words they can make out are, "he will prevail." They drag the heavy cylinder into a hidden alleyway and twist it open. The glow from their flashlights reveals the contents of the cylinder. With gasps of relief, they look at each other with hope in their eyes for the first time in years.
Adam and Bridget were walking home one night from a Free the Real NYC meeting. They were walking in the shadows to avoid being caught by the curfew police when they tripped over a huge titanium cylinder. There were three words etched on it that they could read. "He will prevail?", Bridget asked quizzed, "What's that supposed to mean?" Out of curiosity, Adam opened the container. They shone their flashlights at the titanium cylinder as they gasped in awe and relief. It was a news article from December 13, 2505! It was written about how the leader of the formerly NYC was planning to build a machine that could wipe out the entire city! They rushed back to the secret base of the Free the Real NYC resistance. They put the container on the table. Now that it was in better lighting, they could read the rest of the etchings. They read ψοφώ, Greek for "I'm dying." They learn that the etching was written by the founder of the resistance, Henry Gihigal. He wrote it when the leader of the Cultists, Tabea Thomas, was torturing him with methods unheard of. He wrote the "He will prevail" section speaking of the resistance. The "ψοφώ" was to tell the resistance to choose a new leader. They started planning their attack to make sure that the machine was destroyed.

Using the ideas you previously wrote in your Narrative Organization Chart and your introduction (exposition), you will write the middle (rising action and climax) of your narrative story.

Important note: You will submit your introduction and middle for this assignment.

View the grading rubric as you complete your work. This is your guide to a super submission.

Review the ideas you wrote in your Narrative Organization Chart and your introduction.
Include your introduction paragraph with your middle paragraphs.
Using ideas from your chart, write the middle of your narrative: the rising action and climax.
Make sure you include:
two sensory descriptions
dialogue
two events
the climax event
Write 300 words or more in the middle of your story and write in the third person point of view.
Save your work to your computer or drive.
Submit your work in 03.07 The Middle of Your Story.

Some very kind human did the middle one for me thank you so now all i need is the ending 75 words or more will give brainliest

(I already did the first part i just need someone to do the end for me also read the paragraph to get a full understanding and reading the questions as you do your paragraph the final paragraph must have 75 words or more for the ending and thats all i need this is due today so please hurry thank you.)

I have a D in language art can yall help me plsssssssss

which word most contributes to the tone of this sentence?

which version best uses a variety of sentence structures to enhance the flow and writting style of a story?

It is March 15, in the year 2514. The people of former New York are in desperate circumstances. They are being overrun, and they are losing hope. The banners proclaiming a Free the Real NYC lie in the gutters, trampled by terrified and panicked citizens. Two teens– or kidz, as they are called now– are on their way home from a secret meeting. As they walk in the shadows to avoid detection, they both trip on a huge titanium cylinder. Etched into the surface are a series of scratched-out words. The only words they can make out are, "he will prevail." They drag the heavy cylinder into a hidden alleyway and twist it open. The glow from their flashlights reveals the contents of the cylinder. With gasps of relief, they look at each other with hope in their eyes for the first time in years.

Adam and Bridget were walking home one night from a Free the Real NYC meeting. They were walking in the shadows to avoid being caught by the curfew police when they tripped over a huge titanium cylinder. There were three words etched on it that they could read. "He will prevail?", Bridget asked quizzed, "What's that supposed to mean?" Out of curiosity, Adam opened the container. They shone their flashlights at the titanium cylinder as they gasped in awe and relief. It was a news article from December 13, 2505! It was written about how the leader of the formerly NYC was planning to build a machine that could wipe out the entire city! They rushed back to the secret base of the Free the Real NYC resistance. They put the container on the table. Now that it was in better lighting, they could read the rest of the etchings. They read ψοφώ, Greek for "I'm dying." They learn that the etching was written by the founder of the resistance, Henry Gihigal. He wrote it when the leader of the Cultists, Tabea Thomas, was torturing him with methods unheard of. He wrote the "He will prevail" section speaking of the resistance. The "ψοφώ" was to tell the resistance to choose a new leader. They started planning their attack to make sure that the machine was destroyed.

Using the ideas you previously wrote in your Narrative Organization Chart and your introduction (exposition), you will write the middle (rising action and climax) of your narrative story.

Important note: You will submit your introduction and middle for this assignment.

View the grading rubric as you complete your work. This is your guide to a super submission.

Review the ideas you wrote in your Narrative Organization Chart and your introduction.
Include your introduction paragraph with your middle paragraphs.
Using ideas from your chart, write the middle of your narrative: the rising action and climax.
Make sure you include:
two sensory descriptions
dialogue
two events
the climax event
Write 300 words or more in the middle of your story and write in the third person point of view.
Save your work to your computer or drive.
Submit your work in 03.07 The Middle of Your Story.


(I already did the first part i just need someone to do the middle for me also read the paragraph to get a full understanding and reading the questions as you do your paragraph if you want to you can also do another paragraph 75 words or more to finish it off.)

A very popular form of extended metaphor appears in poems that compare something inanimate to a living, breathing human being. This technique is called _____.

Hyperbole
simile
onomatopoeia
personification

What is the motivation of Greg Heffley and Rodrick Heffley in Diary of a Wimpy Kid?

Which word is a synonym of concise? HELP ME PLZ!!

How does Janina treat the flops?

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